RKMBs Forums .::Important::. Fortress of Awesome Chat I wrote a story for Readers Digest, please give me some feedback

I remember this one guy who wrote a story, and it finished 8th
http://www.writersdigest.com/article/annualwinners77_genre
A year later he tried again, and instead of getting better at his craft, he actually got worse.
http://www.writersdigest.com/article/annualwinners78_genre