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Originally posted by Marc Campbell:
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Originally posted by Disco Steve
Hm... Possibly. I kinda like the cluttering of the panel with yellow/orange lines, with the character just barely dodging them.
This would only work, I think, if you didn't see the gun in the panel. Otherwise, the gun has to follow the lines, and then you get the clutter. If I were you, I might add a panel between 1 and 2 showing Spider-Man creeping up and Punisher training his gun on him. This would give you the opportunity for more snappy dialog. If the dialog includes something about reloading his hollow-tips, then the reader will know those lines aren't laser beams, plus get a pretty good idea of what Frank's wife thought about him in bed.
Thanks for the advice. Here's the new draft!

PANEL 1

Side shot. Punisher firing his gun for no apparent reason. Gunfire illuminating his face. Big phallic cigarette in his mouth. Spikey codpiece... I'm thinking we have an opportunity for a Marvel Select "Spikey Codpiece Punisher" figure here.

PUNISHER: I love cats! You are not a cat! You are dead!

PANEL 2

In front of Punisher. He's firing at us. Spider-Man is behind him. We can see Spider-Man's head over Punisher's shoulder. Punisher is surprised as Spidey talks.

SPIDER-MAN: Do you ever reload that thing? Christ! This isn't Army of Darkness, you know.

PANEL 3

Spider-Man dodging several lines of gunfire.

SPIDER-MAN: I'm sexually attracted to earthquakes!