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Originally posted by Marc Campbell:
Disco, good job. I sense a David Lynch vibe in your dialog. Have you ever seen Twin Peaks? You were probably just an urchin when it was on TV.
I wish I did... I've never seen a David Lynch anything.

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Pick a character with a full face mask so you can't show his/her facial expression. This character is trying to open a safe by figuring out the tumbler combination. The character's ear is pressed against the safe door, or maybe there's a stethoscope involved. It doesn't matter.

Anyway, in one panel, communicate to the reader that the character has successfully turned the right combination without showing the safe door opening or having a CLICK sound effect. Extra points if the character is UNABLE TO SPEAK.
PAGE 1

Panel 1
We're in COBRA sperm bank meant for reproducing thousands of nondescript soldiers with poor marksmanship, in an office.

Panel 2
A vent is suspended in midair, having fallen from the ceiling.

Panel 3
Same as Panel 1.

Panel 4
Snake Eyes descends from the ceiling, sword in hand, ready to slash up anything symmetrically and indescriminately.

Panel 5
Snake Eyes poses, because this is a liscenced comic, so he HAS to do a cool pose or our 12-year old demographic will lose interest. The nostalgic Gen-Xers will buy this crap regardless.

VOICE (op, coming from above, in the venilation ducts): All clear, Snake?

Panel 6
Tunnel Rat descends from the ceiling.

TUNNEL RAT: You know, they all say you're some kind of creepy nutcase, but I think you're good company, personally.

PAGE 2

Panel 1
Shot of a safe.

TUNNEL RAT (OP): That must be it. You open it. I'll look for food. I am one hungry Asian stereotype.

Panel 2
We're behind Snake Eyes as he approaches the safe, slightly crouched, since he's a ninja and ninjas never walk straight.

Panel 3
Close up on Snake Eyes' hand turning the dial, his head pressed against the door of the safe.

Panel 4
Snake Eyes giving a "thumbs up" gesture, ear still against the safe door.

Panel 5
Tunnel Rat entering the room, eating a candy bar.

TUNNEL RAT: You get it?

Panel 6
Tunnel Rat's POV. Snake Eyes is turned to him, holding up a vial.

TUNNEL RAT: Don't look so proud. That's disgusting.